A Million Little Pieces: Review of the Book Oprah Helped Make Famous

As an avid writer, who was definitely affected by this authors (James Frey) use of grammar and rules of the English language, I feel the need to begin this critique/review from the perspective of a fellow writer and proofreader of modern literature and art. If you don't care to hear me analyze the novel like a perfectionist teacher then I suggest you scroll down a few paragraphs. That being said, A Million Little Pieces book almost (almost) and I must repeat ALMOST made me never want to try and break the grammar rules in writing ever again for effect and in addition it ALMOST made me lose respect for all of my favorite bookstores that had put it out on the display to push its sales, which to me, is deeming it a book of award winnable status.

How enjoyable are the following sentences to read?

I went to my work and I sat at my desk and I turned my computer on. I sat at my desk. I sat at my desk and turned my computer on. It was cold and it was quiet and it was dark. It was cold and it was quiet and it was dark. I sat at my desk.