The Raggy Man

Part Two-

By M.S.Medina, published Oct 09, 2007
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Elaina carried the canvas bag slung over her shoulder. In it she carried the day old bread that she took twice a week over to the old mission.The old church was where the old priest fed the hungry and the homeless. She didn't have much, she and Juan usually had little more than beans and rice many nights to eat, but they were certainly much more fortunate then the sad, lonely men, women and sometimes children that stood in line each day just to halt their hunger pangs. She loved helping out where she could, and this was the one place where she felt something almost draw her. She supposed it was the feeling that the rest of her life was out of her control and in this way she felt she could do her part to help someone else just a bit and take her mind off of herself and the loneliness that seemed to eat her up from the inside out.

She entered through the heavy, wooden door that was scarred with years of wear and abuse. Elaina smiled a bit at the irony of the situation as she compared herself to the well used door. They were both worn and growing older by the minute she thought, but the old door still had a few years on her. She straightened her shoulders and dropped the bag full of bread onto the table in the small kitchen where an old white haired man worked over a huge silver pot that was emitting a heavenly aroma. She lightly brushed her hand across his stooped shoulder as she moved around him, and as she did so he straightened up and acknowledged her presence with a smile. Though he had lived many hard years and had seen many of life's sorrows, he had the youngest, kindest, most full of life eyes that she had ever seen.

He wished that he could find that bum and kick the old raggy man again, only this time harder.

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You have the knack for reeling in a reader and making us want to keep reading to find out what is going to happen next and how is it going to end. I do wish you would publish on paper, tho', AC gets on my nerves with the IE error messages; using the back button almost everytime I go to the next page.

Posted on 11/04/2007 at 6:11:00 PM

 
:) :)

Posted on 10/27/2007 at 8:10:00 AM

 
Wow. i wish I could write like you. :)

Posted on 10/22/2007 at 10:10:00 PM

 
Great story! :-)

Posted on 10/15/2007 at 7:10:00 AM

 
A masterful twist.

Posted on 10/14/2007 at 3:10:00 PM

 
:)

Posted on 10/11/2007 at 7:10:00 PM

 
Very Captivating. I enjoyed the Father and son theme. Not knowing the the raggy man was Juan father at the beginning, brought it all togehter at the end. Including God was a great element in the story. When I was reading my mind's eye was seeing everything: the raggy man, Juan, his mother, the priest, and the mission. Keep writing--I look forward to reading you next tale.

Posted on 10/11/2007 at 5:10:00 PM

 
Aly is right...when is that book going to come out?...:)

Posted on 10/11/2007 at 4:10:00 PM

 
Well Mark sorry you didn't like the second part to my two part story. Everyone is entitled to their opinion. Give my regards to Stephen King when you two have lunch next will you?

Posted on 10/11/2007 at 12:10:00 PM

 
Poor quality. Didn't read past the 4th sentence.

Posted on 10/11/2007 at 7:10:00 AM

 
wow..what a nice twist..

Posted on 10/10/2007 at 12:10:00 PM

 
An interesting story - quite touching

Posted on 10/10/2007 at 6:10:00 AM

 
arrr, how nice, I also love the twist!

Posted on 10/10/2007 at 2:10:00 AM

 
Fabulous twist! I anticipated a different ending, but this was better than what I imagined.

Posted on 10/10/2007 at 12:10:00 AM

 
I just wanted to let you know that this is the second part to the story. AC didn't put my part one and part two on the top of the pages. Sorry I hope this wasn't confusing for anyone.

Posted on 10/09/2007 at 8:10:00 PM

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