Coffee Anyone, a Short Fiction Story

a Short Story that Shows Sometimes Things Are Not What They Appear to Be and Then Again, Who Knows?

By robritt, published Dec 27, 2007
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COFFEE ANYONE?

Carolynn Dumas, a traveling nurse, was heading home from a ten o'clock at nigh call. It was late for her and if it hadn't been an emergency call she wouldn't have been out that time of night. She feared being alone on the road after dark. There were so many terrible things going on lately, that she had even thought about refusing late calls.

Suddenly, her headlights captured a small figure ahead on the side of the deserted road. Normally, she wouldn't stop for anyone or anything. However this appeared to be a child frantically waving both arms in the air.

Without thinking, something within her compelled her to take a closer look. Maybe it was empathy for a child, woman's intuition, a premonition, her sense of duty, but whatever it was Carolynn knew she had no choice, she had to stop.

Indeed, it was a child, alone in the dark. She wore a dirty forlorn face, a flimsy white dress and no shoes. As the car came closer, the child bolted into the woods beside the road as quickly as she had appeared and vanished.

She slowly drove by the place where the child had been but could find no sign of her. Carolynn began to wonder if she had just imagined it. She even stopped and called out, but there was no answer or movement in the trees. Finally, she gave up waiting and drove away.

A few miles down the road she saw a sign announcing Joe's diner. "Maybe its time to stop for a cup of coffee?" she said to herself.

She entered and noticed how empty the place was. Carolynn went over and took a seat on a red plastic stool in front of the 50's style counter. She could see across the order pickup-bar into the kitchen where the cook and waitress were talking to each other.

"Hi," the waitress smiled and greeted her through the opening. The large print on her name tag read Dora. Smiling, the waitress asked, "What will you have?"

Carolynn ordered, "A cup of coffee and a cruller! Kind of quiet around here, isn't it Dora?"

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Awesome story..I was sitting at the edge of my seat..

Posted on 04/10/2008 at 10:04:54 PM

 
Great story. Thank you.

Posted on 12/31/2007 at 8:12:49 AM

 
Wonderful story! It gave me chills. Great job on this one!

Posted on 12/31/2007 at 8:12:21 AM

 
Very good, I liked this one a lot!!!!! Why don't you put it on audio? I am sure a lot of people with eyesight problems would love to hear it!

Posted on 12/30/2007 at 10:12:32 PM

 
Ooh! This one was good. A little bit like TWILIGHT ZONE. I like the way you set up the suspense. By the way, it's been a long time since I had a cruller. I used to love those, as a child!

Posted on 12/29/2007 at 7:12:23 AM

 
you are very talented!

Posted on 12/28/2007 at 3:12:15 PM

 
Why are the hairs standing up on the back of my neck? You're good!

Posted on 12/27/2007 at 9:12:11 PM

 
excellent story...:)

Posted on 12/27/2007 at 8:12:41 PM

 
I like coffee storys 5 1/2 if I could

Posted on 12/27/2007 at 7:12:53 PM

 
Very interesting story.

Posted on 12/27/2007 at 7:12:38 PM

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