Terrible Swift Swords

By foggynotion, published Jan 10, 2008
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Moving in shadows

Wearing jet black

Sablehair kunoichi

Prepared for combat

Wearing jet black

From head to boots

Prepared for combat

Unsheathing terrible swift swords

From head to boots

Moving as a cat

Unsheathing terrible swift swords

Confident and strong

Moving as a cat

Using the ambient sounds to her favor

Confident and strong

Throwing herself upon her quarry

Using ambient sound to her favor

Hunting down T-bird, the sadistic pimp

Throwing herself upon her quarry

Releasing a maelstrom

Hunting down T-bird, the sadistic pimp

Striking from above

Releasing a maelstrom

She snatched his soul

Striking from above

Detaching his head

She snatched his soul

And watched the body wilt

Detaching his head

Sablehair kunoichi

Ended a rein of violence and terror

Moving in shadows

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Kari a.k.a. Kunoichi strikes three! More bigger fish to catch! Awesome as usual! :-)

Posted on 01/23/2008 at 10:01:12 AM

 
good job

Posted on 01/10/2008 at 11:01:35 AM

 
She fights the good fight! Great job, yet again! This poem gives people something to hope for that there are still good forces waving and ebbing through our world! Keep up the celestial work and as always, I am such a die-hard fan of yours!!!!! *****

Posted on 01/10/2008 at 8:01:47 AM

 
YESSSSSS!!!!!! OH WOW!!!!! I can't type this enough, but you've really got it! T-Bird is the new character that she snatches his soul!!! WOWEE!!!!! Kevin, she's got the workings of a book or a movie or something along those lines!!!! Have you thought about screenwriting???? I mean, Kari could be the next superhero, or maybe superhero is the wrong word, but you know what I mean. She could be a movie or a book!!!!! WOWEEEE!!!!! YIPPEEE!!!! I really love the dynamics of the poem. I really love how she has her terrrible swords and moving like a cat to save people from T-Bird!!!! NOW THIS IS SOME AWESOME STUFF!!!!!!!!! You've really got it. You really do. This awesome little Kuniochi that you created feels like a living entity in these words of art! Again and again, I love this poem!!!!!

Posted on 01/10/2008 at 8:01:07 AM

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