Separation from Within

United we stood for an extraordinary cause

But somewhere in the middle we fell short

In the beginning the vision was very clear

Now ulterior motives have been revealed

The facades began to fade away

So the truth was no longer concealed

We turned into I and the teamwork effort began to die

We could no longer look in each other
 eyes

The thing that mattered most was holding on to one's pride

The focus was lost although we kept hope alive

But the writing was on the wall as we took a devastating fall

Together we could no longer win

Because we failed to escape

Our biggest struggle

The separation from within



 
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It truly does take "teamwork." Lovely....

Posted on 09/15/2008 at 3:09:52 PM

Very sad, well done :) Sheri

Posted on 09/02/2008 at 11:09:17 PM

VERY nice. I love how you wind up to the close of this truth.

Posted on 08/29/2008 at 7:08:47 AM

Very perceptive view of what happens in many relationships.

Posted on 08/21/2008 at 4:08:33 PM

Excellent

Posted on 08/19/2008 at 9:08:33 AM

Very beautifully done!!!!

Posted on 08/12/2008 at 6:08:33 PM

Very nice job here :)

Posted on 08/11/2008 at 9:08:41 PM

Nice job:)

Posted on 08/11/2008 at 5:08:05 PM

Another great piece. nice work here!

Posted on 08/11/2008 at 5:08:45 PM

Great poem. I have been where this poem takes you. I only hope that I can never visit that place again. My mind tells me that what I hope for may never come to be.

Posted on 08/11/2008 at 3:08:59 PM

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